Thursday, March 22, 2012

Finally!...(Middle)


So for the last two years I have been writing a book. A young adult fiction book not based on anything in particular but a book that has made me proud. Today I finally finished it. I have been working hard to finish it but at the same time I didn't want to just end it and call it a day which is why it has taken so long for me to finish. I am hoping that I can publish it myself or perhaps send a copy to a publisher and have them publish it but let's just be real about this. I thought that I may include a little blurb from part two of the book just to give you a little idea of what the book is about...



“So?” Cooper asked. He seems nervous.

“We are having a baby.” I said.

“Are you serious?” Cooper leaned over and gave me a kiss and a hug.

“But…” I began.

“But what?”

“I want to make some things clear.”

“Okay. What things?” Cooper seemed a little nervous again.

“I am not as uppity about this like you are and I want to make sure that you understand that.” I said.

“I do understand that.”

“No I am not sure that you do. You are so excited about this and I am nervous and worried. I want you to respect the fact that it may take some time for me to get use to the idea of me becoming a mother at such a young age.”

“But you aren’t that young Scout. You’re almost seventeen.”

“Okay that is barely old enough to drive let alone bring a baby into this world. What I am trying to say is that I have always wanted to have a child I just never thought that I would be having a baby so young and unprepared. And I know that we are prepared financially but I need to make sure that I am prepared emotionally. And like I said it may take time and for that to happen I need you to be on my side. I need you to allow me to get to that point on my own and not be so happy and talking about it all the time.” Cooper was looking a little sad. “Don’t get me wrong Cooper I love that you are so excited about this but I will be to that point too. I am just not there right now. Who knows in a month I may be jumping from the roof tops excited and singing hallelujah. But right now I need to take this slow and be ready on my own.” Cooper didn’t say anything and that was making me a tad more than a little nervous.


That is just a small part of what is all to come when I finish editing...

6 comments:

Rusty Webb said...

Well good luck, a strong scene for sure.

Briane P said...

I like it. Other readers: I got a sneak peek at the first few chapters and this is a great story.

Grumpy Bulldog, March Madman said...

Makes me wonder what the rest of it is all about. Congrats on finishing it!

Michael Offutt, Tebow Cult Initiate said...

I like the scene. Congrats on finishing, this is a big first step. In polishing up your query letter, I suggest that you network with Matthew Macnish at the Quintessential Questionable Query Experiment (you can find the link to it on my blog sidebar).

One suggestion regarding dialogue. People, when they talk, use contractions. I don't know anyone that says "I am" as opposed to "I'm" or "You are" instead of "You're". Additionally, when you combine two complete clauses with a conjunction, i.e. "I am not as uppity about this like you are and I want to make sure that you understand that" you need to use a comma before the conjunction.

Middle said...

Thank you for all of your encouraging thoughts and suggestions, they are very much appreciated!

Andrew Leon said...

Good job! Finishing a novel is quite an accomplishment by any standard.

I'd also agree with Michael about the contractions. One of the things I always have to do during editing is go back and contract, because I don't do that when I'm doing my initial writing for some reason.
Also, watch your tenses. Your first line there is present tense ("seems nervous") while the rest is past tense. It's important to have it all past or all present unless there's a reason to switch.